Poetry Class Poem Poem by Kailynd McGregor
Poetry Class Poem
The sun like,
Millions of golden raindrops,
Are falling on the land.
The moon like,
An island, constantly floating,
In an ocean of darkness.
The sun like,
A lion stands
Bright and ferocious.
High above its kingdom,
Gleaming down upon its followers,
The moon like a fish,
Swimming, in a sea of despair,
Iridescent, gloomy, always frowning.
The first six lines are very interesting and very well put. The ending could use a little work but other than keep up the work. Can't wait till it is all the way done!
I don't know enough about poetry to be of any help...but I did enjoy reading it with it's vivid similes....you must be a morning person..... jk.....thanks Vallerie
This poem is for my class, so please give me feedback. I'm not quite done yet, so help me out with what you think!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
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5/2/2024 8:33:47 PM # 1.0.0.1119
good good. It contains good form with a posture to present itself. I liked it bu tas before you can work on the ending unless that is not the ending? but It was good on the hand. Inkweaver