Ph: Life: Kiddie Porn Poem by Brian Johnston
Ph: Life: Kiddie Porn
Kiddie Porn
Do you trust in the future enough to have kids,
Or is family - flailing of heart split in two?
Is itmore symptomatic of life on the skids
Could it be that a child's an extension of you?
Is desire to feel love what gives birth to a child?
I'm just asking a question here, don't mean to judge,
Or an act of amoral libido run wild
With a consequence, 'parent, ' you're hoping to fudge?
Do you think that a child's like an unfinished rhyme?
To create what 'outlives' you I well understand
But a child is not you, is itself all the time
And it's future's more fluid, no way its path's planned!
I think poetry too's more a 'gift' of my muse,
But my poem's an action I'm dreaming will serve,
(Did you make sperm or egg? I don't mean to confuse!)
Are you stranger at-bat, life has just thrown a curve?
Did I make words that rhyme, or first music, its beat?
And my consciousness, time, are both seas I swim in,
What I did not create, does this spell my defeat?
'Greater Author' acknowledged might mean we all win!
Brian Johnston
30th of July 2018
(cont.) Stanza 2 is my favorite & would fill out its own poem is expanded. You've given life to a good poem. you made good rhymes; not sure about music (i did not notice any; i was too busy looking for Kiddie. bri :)
(cont.) In stanza 3 only one apostrophe is not needed. the possessive its takes NO apostrophe; its (oops!) ...it's a common enough error. ha ha. you got it right/correct the 2nd time. ;) i say stanza 4 is trying to cover too much territory, and maybe you shouldn't try to be cute/clever! as for sperm/egg: i like BOTH with toast for breadfast. Last stanza would be understood by more if they knew more about you; a Poet's Notes perhaps is in order. (cont.)
Or an act of amoral libido run wild Being a high-class poet, i prefer concupiscence instead of libido. don't YOU! ? CAn LIBIDO be amorAL? ? ? after more definition checking, i say libido IS amoral, but NOT immoral! ! But an act prompted by libido may be immoral, though not necessarily. With a consequence, 'parent, ' you're hoping to fudge? i 'love' the use of fudge here (not candy fudge) . there's a misplaced apostrophe; blame PH. (cont.)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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p.s. to MyPoemList, ....for kicks, if nothing else. bri :)