Oases Poem by Sheila Knowles

Oases

Rating: 4.9


I find
oases in strange places
spot
the jewel inside each fool
catch
the drift in every rift
embrace
the gold in words untold
observe
the hidden lining shining
grasp
the smile beneath the guile
locate
some gain in every pain
lick
the cream in every dream

but I cannot
seem to see

the good in you

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Uriah Hamilton 09 September 2005

I super dig the rhyme pattern and it is pretty clever with the put-down ending.

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sheila knowles 09 September 2005

thanks Uriah...a bit of rhyme never hurts every now and then :))

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Kathleen Paul-Flanagan 09 September 2005

Hey Stranger! Loved this....did you rhyme? :) I'm teasing you. I liked the way this one read and looked. And I loved the ending. Great stuff as always! !

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sheila knowles 09 September 2005

LOL! Yup! I did...but don't tell anyone :))

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Raynette Eitel 09 September 2005

This is an 'I gotcha' poem first rate...not ugly or vicious...but carrying the reader along with beauty in each 'oases' and then the zinger. Well done. Raynette

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Tony Jennett 29 November 2005

Great stuff. Wonderfully hopeless bitter twist in the last four lines but it would have had more punch if those last lines shaped up to the form of the foregoing ones. I suspect you gave up trying to do this. Please have another go - even if just for this humble admirer

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Wanda Swim Strunk 03 November 2005

I like this. I like the bounce of the words both phonetic as well as visually. But something about reading it leaves me feeling melancholy.

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Katie Swan 13 October 2005

Hya Sheila! Great poetry as usual! Never get tired of your poems! Loved every word! Luv from Katie xoxoxoxo

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Peter A. Crowther 11 October 2005

Lovely double internal rhymes and a neat satisfying ending. Very good

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Richard Stilwell 30 September 2005

Well put........ Rick

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