O My Jaan Poem by Asif Andalib
O My Jaan
O my Jaan now let's have fun
With my body's machine gun
I will kill your mind's Satan
With my body's powerful pen
I want to write a love poem
You will forget all other men
With my body's an injection
I can cure your love-diseases
Please let me do it off and on
My kisses are like paint and brush
I want to paint my love with it
So let me paint, baby please hush
My eyes are like sky's black hole
Baby, please stare at my eyes
You will reach your wanted goal
Very interesting rhyming and overall sense of over passionate love, but you made it work and I envy that.Very good job.
Nicely expressed love i like it...... you have a good rhythm beautiful ideas especially the paint and brush paragraph i liked it most good luck Guess Who
That was classic. It really sounded like someone who has set out to convince his lover. The rhyme was perfect, the rhythm deliberate and the message romantic and wily. I think d first line of d 3rd stanza shd read 'with my body's injection'. Thanx for d invite.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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5/6/2024 4:16:19 PM # 1.0.0.1119
Good poem but I feel like it's missing something or mybe the way I read it