Nocturnally Conceived Poem by Souren Mondal

In any case, nice idea and nice poem...........................

about haiku: - - you can read many haiku from Matsuo Basho, Yosa Buson, Kobayashi Issa, Masaoka Shiki - plus a few other Japanese haiku poets - here, at PH - - if you go to the web site of the '' Haiku Society of America '' (just search through Google) you'll find many haiku and learn also about haiku rules - too many who write 'haiku' don't know what a haiku really is.. But we have also to consider that nowadays, the concept of TRADITIONAL HAIKU is slightly different from that of MODERN HAIKU. Also in Japan. Japanese Traditional Haiku is the ones I prefer, but we can't deny that we are not Japanese. For example: KIGO (the reference to Season) are too closely linked to the Japanese WORLD (weather patterns, regional locations, traditions, ..) and for many of them we can't find the same expressions in our languages. So we need to be open towards ''Modern'' haiku - which are written by many million writers worldwide, but, in the same time, trying not to forget the basilar rules of haiku [an example is one of my own haiku I've posted at PH: it's a 'modern' haiku.. almost a senryu, but it's still an haiku.. :) ]. p.s.: HAIKU is both singular and plural

Aloha Souren... As you command: Dark, sweaty blue bed a nightmare of memories this idea of prose and this is not Haiku... it is Senryu... not of nature, but of humanity... and you have begun so well indeed... Thank you for your efforts to increase the viability of this craft through your shared thoughts and words... All of the best from this life, to you, and all of your relations... Michaelw1two

Editing suggestion 1. This is actually a senryu (same as Haiku, but with focus on human rather than nature) 2. Fabrizio told me Haikus do not include a title... However, if you change this to a senryu then I'm not sure... But I like your title. 3. Suggestion to edit your poem so it fits the syllabic structure: 1. Take out the word 'A' in line 2 2. Line three 'A poem is born' I agree with Kelly that this is a great idea for your poem... So I think you should edit it. Great first effort! I just wrote my first haiku last week...

The 2nd line and 3rd line each had one too many syllables (8 & 6) but the style was flawless. An idea penned tersely that causes the reader to think. Such nocturnal overtures haunt me into poetry as well