Light The Heart Poem by Kranthi Pothineni
Light The Heart
Time pushed me into dark
It closed all the doors
And locked me in cage
For days and months
With no rays of light
I lived in with a hope
In that cage for months
For a light of hand
To reach my darkness
And to pull into light
Days and months passed
In darkness and hope
No light of hand came
To pull me into light
Slowly my hope died
I stopped to look
For light of hand
And started to think
How to light darkness?
How to light darkness?
Finally the light came
In my cage of darkness
Its not light of hand
Its a light of lights
That showed me light
It divvy's any darkness
It unlocks any cage
It lights all the time
It always helps me out
Its a light of my heart
For some reason, this poem just doesn't connect with the reader, Kranthi, at least not me. I seems to have a good idea for a theme, but in the telling is just falls a bit short. The final verse is not smooth like the earlier verse were and seems contrived. Perhaps a little rephrasing of it is in order, or perhaps you should try a different approach at the final verse, one that carries forward the impact of the preceeding verses. Carl.
when there is no love there is always darkness you at least found the light, to make everything alright. GR8 WRITE A TEN
I do really think that this one is fabulous.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/26/2024 3:23:56 AM # 1.0.0.1119
....i didnt a lot of feeling in this one its a great theme but something in the last parts really didnt make me feel the poem KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK THO