Island To Island Poem by Nomad Omnia

Island To Island

Rating: 3.6


The wind of humanity washes over me
Tugging at my clothes
sucking the breath from my lungs.

My brain is numbed by its coldness

The stream of chatter
Cascades down the escalators
Deafening, drowning.

I am jettisoned into a heaving sea

Jostled by flotsam
In an undertow of metal,
Horns sounding in a fog of traffic.

I lie in a broken surf of foaming cars

The Hebridean gale was never this cruel
The Highland torrent never so raucous
The Atlantic never so un-kind...

Corpse-cold, I drift to a western shore.

(Thanks to Jacqui Thewless for opening my eyes to an improvement to this poem and sharing her skill) .

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
(this poem gets read more often than any other I've written - I'd be interested to know why - if anyone can enlighten me)
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
nomad omnia 02 September 2009

Quick reply to Jacqui and Matt, and thanks both for your comments. 'The Lake Isle', Matt, yes, I love it, one of the poems I memorised in primary school, and which has brought me comfort ever since. If this piece brought that to your mind, then I am honoured indeed! Jacqui, you are right - 'unkind' would fit better...and I am now tempted to change it! . But for this piece, I didn't do any formal crafting, just let it roll, as Matt says. And i wanted accuracy...the place that inspired it is not unkind, but it can be unforgiving. (But me, I always forgive...eventually! ! : -))

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Matt Mooney 02 September 2009

A great poem.It rolls on like the ocean itself. Read WB Yeat's 'The Lake Isle of Inishfree'.

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Jacqui Thewless 02 September 2009

Nice poem. One word bugged me, tho: The Atlantic never so unforgiving. Corpse-cold - would have preferred: The Atlantic never so unkind. Corpse-cold - since have a thing for alliteration / and / syllable-counting! Forgive?

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Neil Mac Neil 22 August 2009

LIked this poem very much. Its imagery and movement work well. I have written and publsihed several poems about the islands and highlands of Scotland. I hope to read more of your work in the coming weeks.

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Patti Masterman 13 August 2009

This is my kind of metaphor! Thank you for such colorful journey.

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