Invisible Is Her Poem by elena winters

All I can say is this is so breath taking....It reached deep within my soul..I could actually feel the pain! Keep writing..its a gift you have..I am in awe of this piece of work~autum

sad and stunning imagery you build here, Breeze...aweful write...good...ten for this piece

what an imagery.it is confusing at the begenning but it makes sense at last.it is interesting to read

This is a very emotional poem and features vivid imagery in it. What it lacks in writing discipline, it clearly makes up in emotional impact. For example, your first line, though a trifle long, is fine, but that second line nearly runs off the page, while your third line consists of only three words! Since this is a free style poem, you can move some of it to begin the third line by ending the second line with the word 'was' and starting the third line with 'he was her...' It reads better that way, too. Having been a young poet myself, I once thought, like all young poets do, that my words were set in stone and could not be changed or improved in any way. Fortunately, I wised up and learned how to write, like most poets eventually do. Once you have written a poem, it is not really finished. You must go through a process of trying to improve what you have said, make it more effective and a better all around write. Once you learn this, you will become a better poet, for you clearly have the talent to express yourself. Carl.

wow that was just a beautiful, it was wow, i really love this one it 's a ten on my list! ~Hazel G.E