I Smoke And I Think Of You Poem by chloe young

I Smoke And I Think Of You

Rating: 5.0


i wake up and i think of you
and i look out of my window
it is grey and the lights stopped
glittering a long time ago
and i smoke and i smoke and i smoke

i pour my coffee and i think of you
my mugs are stained, the blemishes plaster the
cups and never come off. they have left
their mark, exactly they way you stamped yours
and i smoke and i smoke and i smoke

the shower beats my skin and i think of you
i scrub; i scratch my pores with soap
but the filth resides, it clings and
fills my orifices. i am choked by dirt
and i smoke and i smoke and i smoke

i exist through my days and i think of you
everything is dampened by desolation and every
one has your eyes. this city repulses me, it sneers
at me and growls ‘there is nothing to keep you here’
and i smoke and i smoke and i smoke.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Susan Jarvis 25 June 2009

Full of pain, pathos and choking smoke. This repetition works really well with the oppressive emotions and 'desolation' of the growling city. A well crafted, emotive poem - a real privilege to read! S :)

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Chloe! a parfum.... leaves breathing such an interesting affair.... very seasoned for this tender age

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this is good.. but smoking is bad.....nice poetry.

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tom mc quade 25 July 2009

..excellent poem..i love how obsessive behavior like smoking mirrors obsessive thinking..those chronic unending circular thoughts surrounding a lover..we all have had this experience..smokers or not! ..well done chloe..im so looking forward for more poetry from you...keep it up! ! :) tom

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Jerry Hughes 11 July 2009

Smoking is a dying habit, give it up. Seriously, Jerry

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Safa Sulaiman 07 July 2009

reading your poem, ......i could see the grey smoke, good work.....

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Kale Beaudry 07 July 2009

This is further prove that 19 year olds like ourselves can write just as wisely... I think the line 'clogging every orifice' sums up your poem very nicely. And you smoke, and you smoke, and you smoke.

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Luke Holt 03 July 2009

it perpetuates avery trapped and suffocated feeling, i know how it feels going through two packs a day nostalgically yearning but wishing the thoughts would vanish very pallitable for my current state of being if you wish check out my piece 'psalm of the harlot' thanks for sharing ~L.H.~

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