First Poem To The Unknow I Poem by Tian karen

First Poem To The Unknow I



First Poem to The Unknown I
Karen
A sudden wake from the book
On which I once bet my future
A huge sense of LOSS -the sharp hook
Crossed my HEART, dripping a mixture
-blood, tears.was my CHOICE
The burial of once-dreamed life? !
You are not i, i not you. make sense
Nothing now. As long as the ticket safe
Tucks well in my HAND, then good choice.
Say you know yourself Never,
But try to fix alter ego Ever.

September 25,2008

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jazib Kamalvi 18 September 2017

A sublime start with a nice poem, Tian. You may like to read my poem, Love And Lust. Thank you.

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Jerry Hughes 16 October 2008

Your poem started well Tian, fell apart at the end I fear. Try writing it again in free verse. Best wishes, Jerry

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Joseph Poewhit 27 September 2008

Sort of like a programed computer

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