Listen
Open
Your eyes
Draw the curtain
While your lips whisper softly
Into a hollow projection of myself clinging here
To a lifeless shell echoing a love song of what may never be
Dreams so cultivate the lifelines of creation so it seems you and I
Are satellites drifting in space waiting for reception
You are the unstable metaphor
I've always wanted
But we
Can't
Be
My
Minds
Eye sees
Energy in imagination
Reaching towards all your elusiveness
Stretching outward beyond my means to touch your
Harmony while melodies sing from within all that is forgotten, my sweet memory
How you never leave me, but hide, within the shadows of my heart
Beating on the walls from within my depths
You break me so easily
So I can't
I can't
Hold
You
Wonderful! Breaking away from structured form in this FS pattern has helped to or made you create a poetic story of emotional impact that delivers enjoyment and interest to me. Absolutely love it. Geoffrey.
NICE! I tried doing a Fibonacci sequence like this, within the guidelines of the syllable structure, but it doesn't have the density of content hear. The mirror effect works well especially for the middle, I can see where you were going with it, the problem is the website doesn't have good parameters for keeping the work as you transcribe it in the text box. Stretching outward beyond my means to touch your harmony Not a pickup line you would use to meet a girl, but it works well. Excellent content, and Great execution. If Escher was a poet he would approve
(0) 1 1 2 3 5 8 13... Wow!) Very clever! And pasionate.
Beautifully written. I enjoyed reading it. The three poems you invited me to read are wonderful. This poem is very good to. For some reason and I have no Idea why; I feel as if this were all coming from a distant time. Well, before I was even alive. Bien!
I like the typical structured form being breached. I hate those who are determined to stick to a text book style. Loved the flow and emotion here. The horrible existence of being so close yet so far and unreachable.
This is by far an extraordinary poem. One is softly projected into the poetic land of dreams and feelings of the poet.in a most captivating way. The metaphors and images caress the mind and heart. A kind of miraculous hypnosis surrounds and makes us weightless, as we travel thru this oneiric world. I believe this elusive love of the poet is poetry itself, in any case beautifully done and unforgettable. To be read many, many times. Truly wonderful, different from anything else and terribly romantic with a sent of the roses of time, infinite and eternal.
Your elusive lover always just out of your reach as you dream of a connection of mind and spirit to capture your butterfly of fleeting affection. Outstanding write!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I love this poem for all its qualities: structure, visual and emotional impact! Absolutely Wonderful!