Detached Poem by May N

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here you are next to me
us close enough to touch
yet feeling so far away from you
it’s like my world was set on autopilot

where we go through daily motions
conversing occasionally but not minding
the actions that are taken, robotic and lifeless
there is nothing inside us, it’s all dead

like watching myself from above,
surreal like a movie as life goes on
and everything is grey, dull, and numb
feelings are killed and buried deep inside

standing next to you here,
a chill radiating of your body.
showing no emotions, you stand
motionless, you look into my eyes

I fall into a black pit of endlessness
your eyes have nothing in them
your passion drained, your life gone
your soul eternally vanish from the surface

like an empty shell of ice,
the coldness resonates from you
and the void between us grows
chilling me to the bone

Now the grey turns to black
as my world slowly fades
and I close my eyes for good
hoping to pass into a life of better

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Lindsey Ashton 06 November 2008

like ships passing at night, its sad when a relationship becomes a shadow of what it once was. you write about it so well and emotionally. great write.

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Emily Oldham 17 September 2008

YOU'RE SO TALENTED! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! WOW, this poem is brill (as you've probably guessed!) Thanks

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Stacey Watts 08 August 2008

Wow such wonderful expression. I can feel your emotion all through it. Thanks for sharing this poem very good.

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May N

May N

Cagayan de Oro, Philippines
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