Black Holes Poem by Dave SmithWhite
Black Holes
Was it another universe?
So many years ago.
My life with you was interspersed,
By affairs you did not know.
I kept my guilty secrets,
Pressed to a heaving chest;
But now that I have been found out,
The truth must be confessed!
Was it another lifetime;
On a set built yesterday?
You wrote it out in pantomime,
A role I could not play.
Was it the season of bad dreams,
Acted out in floods of rage?
When treason was a national theme,
And blood would stain the page.
Was it a nerveless universe,
Uncurved by mystery?
When rational thought was not perverse,
But served as history.
Was it some other century?
For it seems another age,
Where reason was a cultural meme,
And rhyme, the higher stage.
Was it another universe,
On a different plane?
Where all exists in reverse,
From death to born again.
Was it that special universe,
Dim lit by avid brain?
Where even light cannot traverse,
And night and darkness reign.
Was it another epoch?
Was it another time?
My love for you was built on rock,
And not on silt and slime!
Was it some other era;
In another place?
Were we those star-crossed lovers,
Somehow lost in outer space?
Was it another universe?
Down the blackest of black holes.
Does my remorse exert a force,
Inverse to troubled souls?
Should I spurn the fleeting moment,
For a lifetime of control;
Or burn in fiery torment,
As your anger takes it's toll?
An awesome write, full of emotions and their steady flow deserving Poem of the Day. Heartiest Congratulations.
The form and content are admirable. Lovely and very passionate poem embellished in poetic rhyme and rhythm. Excellent job. Keep up the good work. Thanks for sharing Dave and do remain blessed.
a lovely poem of the feelings one encounters whilst flying through space and our time? brilliantly written!
dave, first, i affirm the craft of this poem- it's good. on the ideas in it, it bears resemblance to my poems the bridge and on deceit, both with the same girl in mind who i treated badly. i like how you combine your confession with an exploration, if i read it correctly, of perspective in general. it appears you now realize, as i have slowly in my life, that in the lens of love is clarity, is truth. on this idea, if you're interested, please see my poem aging as ascent. i look forward to checking out more of your work. glen kappy
A great big THANK YOU to all who commented here. As this poem was last years POD (060317) I was surprised to see it selected a second time as poem of the day exactly one year later (060318) . Best Wishes to all, from Sydney. David Smith-White.
It is a brilliant poem on universe and life having vivid and stunning expression. Nice penmanship. Thanks and congratulations for being selected this poem as the poem of the day.
My love for you was built on rock- - excellent expression- -beautiful poem- -10
I, too, enjoyed the smooth craftsmanship of this piece. Well-chosen words; an excellent rhyming scheme that bears the weight of the imagery easily and comfortably. You carried the extended metaphor consistently and engagingly. A very professional work of poetry. Bravo.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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You've described your feelings in a unique way. Sometimes we experience such situations that make us feel that 'all exist in reverse'.