Being sneaky = trouble
Trouble = punishment
Punishment = pain
Pain = loneness
Loneness = sadness
Short, powerful. The words that describe this poem. I liked how you sort of felt what people go through when they are first sneaky, then it goes on into worse things that could happen to you. I really felt those words! This poem is like expressing your feelings! That is what I like! Keep writing these wonderful poems that will someday be known worldwide! Even though on poemhunter it is worldwide too. Ha ha ha!
you express yourself fluidly, and I agree with Ben, it's great to experiment with different forms of writing, Keep it up!
I like your willingness to experiement with new forms. This helps us realize how we end up sometimes. Poetry is all about expressing feelings. That's what you have done.
haa..! Flicking through your poems.. i like this. The simplicity is nice. As long as you work on developing your verses and just keep pushing yourself to write better every time you get an idea, you'll become a great poet :)
I love short poem thats what i started writting with... Very good and True ~MaXx
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
That is a short poem but good