you have stolen so much from me
leaving me hardly able to carry on
so used and empty i have become
this hollowness is turning me numb
hoping eventually pain will subside
crushed, my heart is barely beating
wondering how something so broken
you can take and shatter even more
the hurt and confusion is too much
finding comfort only from a blade
this broken girl needs to get away
trapped, still held captive by it all
alone and hurting, another tear falls
Great write.....and I loved the part 'this hollowness is turning me numb', sometimes 'numb' is so freeing...hugs n blessings
A very heart touching write that brought back to my mind painful memories of yesterday but guess what? I survived and so you very soon! This is a very beautiful and well crafted write! 10+++ God Bless You for always! Romeo from New York City (Thank you for all your valuable comments) ...
nice i especially like the ending line great composing 10 up =D
The vast primordial flood captured in one tear. Exquisite execution!
Deeply emotional write. Know that you are not a lone, I care about you, my dear friend. I pray God will give you comfort. Keep penning, love your work! :)
Don't let any man define you. Treat yourself the way you want to be treated. Do things for yourself that make you feel better, like, buy yourself something nice, do art, taking yourself out to a art show or museum, go for a long walk, whatever you would like to do, anything other then waiting around for this other person to make you feel better, it's not going to happen, it will in fact get worse if you don't put yourself first. I love all your poems, there so well written, so truthful, meaningful, and have great rhythm. You are poetry. :)
so much emotion in so few lines.. yes dramatic, but life and its enevitable pain are dramatic... I again empathise..and again see the beauty behind the tragedy. Brilliant.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I loved the last two lines, 'trapped, still held captive by it all alone and hurting, another tear falls' Beautifully written. This poem is captivating, and you really think hard, or rather, you make us think, Really, how could any body broke what is already broken. nice read, keep writing :)