A Nailed Coffin - Life? English & Japanese Poem by Elena Sandu
A Nailed Coffin - Life? English & Japanese
Coffin pounded nails
Economy of air
Survive, never complain!
No wasting any air
Be happy you still have
the freedom's scent!
With own blood
-color of love
feel free to paint
on the coffin walls
a million hearts!
a mountain, a river
a sea, the sky,
whole world! !
Keep happy, smile:
-only a coffin, could not
make you feel alone,
Right? ! ?
釘 打 た れ た 棺 桶 - 人 生 ？
釘 を 打 た れ た 棺 桶
空 気 の 節 約
生 き 残 れ 、 不 平 を 言 わ ず に ！
わ ず か な 空 気 も 無 駄 に す る こ と な く
自 由 の 香 り を 感 じ れ る だ け
あ り が た く 思 え ！
自 ら の 血 で
-愛 の 色
ど う ぞ 自 由 に お 描 き な さ い
棺 桶 の 壁 に
百 万 の 心 臓 を ！
山 、 川
海 、 空
す べ て の 世 界 を ！
ず っ と 幸 せ に 、 笑 顔 で ：
-た か が 棺 桶 な ん か で
孤 独 を 感 じ る こ と な ん て な い
そ う で し ょ う ？ ！ ？
Powerful and sharp touching lines reaching each and every corner of the whole blue planet. Nice and impressive write.
Hmm... I like this, the dark tone of the coffin, the analogy that someone is trapped but it is by their making perhaps? They can still paint the hearts on the inside walls of their prison? I like that, the lines of the hearts being painted, the mountain, the sea, the sky.... it is a pretty poem with a dark belly! Well Done. HG: -) x
I love the up-beat tempo of your poems. you have a very unique style, very open and free, (just like your heart!) if we all could all see the world through your eyes it would be such a better place to live in. your poems go from Strength to Strength!
Deeply philosophical, well worded cry of the heart is presented here. Thought provoking poem. Thanks.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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Comments of poetfreak friends: Stellar display of quality frr-verse in poetic motion////Like the title! ~FjR 22 Jun 2011 by Frank James Ryan, Jr. / FjR | Reply xWow! A poem with a hidden message dear Elena. It was interesting to read and even - reread it. 22 Jun 2011 by rarebird | Reply xbookmarked 22 Jun 2011 by Indah Widiastuti | Reply xfascinating read... so much in the layers of this poem to ponder... powerful and important 25 Jun 2011 by eleanor prince | Reply xSplendid. We can create happiness everywhere. 28 Jun 2011 by Chris Jibero | Reply picture of poetwithcancer xDear Elena, / You are right, anything can be the subject of humor, and it isn't mean hurtful humor, it can make good hearts laugh and smile. This poem of yours does that. / I find that it reminds me of a song I heard in my childhood: // It ain't the cough / That carries you off, / It's the coffin they carry you off in. / So laugh and sing, and have a good fling. / Just don't fling and get flung once too often. / Live for today, and you'll never go wrong- / As long as you think of the words of this song: / It ain't the cough that carries you off, / It's the coffin they carry you off in. - Michael 29 Jun 2011 by poetwithcancer xWonderful message 30 Dec 2014 by Mya-Angel Madden | Reply xI like this, not what I expected from reading the title. a clever and entertaining write. 31 Dec 2014 by Night Owl | Reply xa very interesting write this is, great write! 4 Apr 2015 by George R. Lister Quite a sarcastic tone to it, a bit of humour in the thoughtless comments people make that patronise us or make us feel like we're complaining over nothing. Although it could be deeper, and be meaning that we make our own situations easier or harder depending on how we deal with them. Thought-provoking write. 8 Oct 2015 by Jason Clarke