A Moment Longer. Poem by Lulu Muffin

A Moment Longer.

Rating: 2.3


I held that memory
for just a second longer.
I held you before that memory
would vanish away
from my fingertips.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jerry Hughes 12 August 2005

hello Samantha, with no disrespect, your poem would have read better like this. Meaning, write from the heart, but edit from the head. Best of writing luck, Jerry If I'd have held your memory for one second longer. I'd have held on to it, before it vanished away.

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