Geetha Jayakumar

Gold Star - 9,259 Points (Kerala Palakkad)

A Man With A Black Coat! - Poem by Geetha Jayakumar

Walking down the crowded lane
I just had a glimpse of man with black coat and a big hat covering his face.
So mysterious he looked
My curiosity aroused to see him.
But he vanished in no time.
Then I entered a lonely road
To my home.
Full of trees and a garden with silence.
Just enjoying its beauty I went along.
Then again caught a glimpse of same black coat.
But this time horror stuck me.
I felt he was following me.
The started walking fast.
Then started running.
Then I just turned back
He was not visible.
I felt relieved.
About to go, to my horror
He was right in front.
He caught my hand so tight.
I thought I will just faint.
Then slowly he removed his hat.
To my horror I couldn't believed
Leaving me gasped
It was my beloved
And he was expected next week only.
Oh my God!
But it was such a surprise full of
Sweetness, and horror too
How can I ever forget such a wonderful
Surprise.
Life is meaningful when surprises
Come on our way!
Am I right!

©ALL RIGHTS RESERVED BY GEETHA JAYAKUMAR 2014
© 2014.

Geetha Jayakumar.


Comments about A Man With A Black Coat! by Geetha Jayakumar

  • Gold Star - 10,586 Points Madathil Rajendran Nair (4/10/2015 11:10:00 PM)

    Yes. Truly said. Life is drab without its surprises. (Report) Reply

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  • Gold Star - 12,526 Points Amitava Sur (10/1/2014 6:07:00 AM)

    All that is well, since it ended well. The black with hat also must be hiding to give a pleasant surprise. A pleasant imagery, enjoyed reading it.... A nice poem (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 38,318 Points Akhtar Jawad (9/7/2014 9:31:00 PM)

    A nice write, that needs to think whether it was a dream or a pleasant surprise. If it was a dream it reflects a desire in black coating of fears and if it really happened its a lovely pleasant surprise but the question remains why he was hiding himself. In any case a beautiful poem. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 585 Points Silvi Tripathy (4/15/2014 10:56:00 PM)

    Absolutely right. A beautiful experience mem. Thanks (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 66,573 Points Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (3/27/2014 11:45:00 PM)

    Life is meaningful when surprises
    Come on our way...nice one...10

    life is stable
    if there is no trouble
    life is hard
    if there is no way forward (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 16,823 Points Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (3/3/2014 10:17:00 AM)

    This is like a suspense movie ending in beautiful notes of love, ecstasy and emotions...............Geetha......
    very nicely composed............... (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 18,455 Points Ramesh Rai (8/13/2013 9:16:00 PM)

    wonderful feelings. and you are right too. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 0 Points Aswath Raman (8/13/2013 2:58:00 AM)

    Ha! As I expected! Who else but your beloved can make you fearful and loved at the same time? These little things, I believe are the pleasure of life..Good write! (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 211 Points R.j. Wynn (8/12/2013 1:41:00 PM)

    Loved it. It was a great time. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,283 Points Shahzia Batool (8/12/2013 1:33:00 PM)

    just gripping a verse-story...you have the dramatics Geetha! ! !
    A strong write! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 10,101 Points Heather Wilkins (8/12/2013 12:21:00 PM)

    a poem full of mystery good to know it was the beloved one. a good write (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,829 Points Kavya . (8/12/2013 11:41:00 AM)

    A mystery poem with a beautiful ending..luvd it (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,972 Points David Wood (8/12/2013 5:17:00 AM)

    So many emotions in your poem, I loved it. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 42 Points Adheez Van Der Beanthz (8/11/2013 2:19:00 PM)

    I can feel the curiosity
    i can feel the emotions
    i can feel the terror
    at the end, i smile too, willy-nilly
    :)
    loved it
    thanks for sharing (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 8,663 Points Hazel Durham (8/11/2013 8:27:00 AM)

    A good build up of suspense that turns into a lovely surprise that create's such wondeful feelings!
    Lovely write! (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,295 Points Tarobinson1103@gmail.com Robinson (8/11/2013 5:08:00 AM)

    Something here to say, Something to think about
    Curiosity, fear, shock and relief, finally gladness and
    happiness. Some of life's most powerful emotions. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,201 Points Tirupathi Chandrupatla (8/10/2013 9:53:00 PM)

    It was my beloved
    Nice surprise. Maybe he also changed his gait. Beautiful poem. Thank you. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Kevin Halls (8/10/2013 3:32:00 PM)

    Very mysterious Geetha but you've left the reader thinking is this a true person or your imagination?
    I often see someone I've known in a crowded street but when I approach I find it isn't, and I discover that it was my mind playing tricks on me. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Deepak Sawhney (8/10/2013 12:45:00 PM)

    Great ending ma'am. Life without surprises would be so bland. A little adrenalin rush every now & then, is so necessary to keep it fighting fit. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,936 Points Dave Walker (8/10/2013 12:17:00 PM)

    Really great poem/ story with a great ending. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, August 9, 2013

Poem Edited: Friday, October 31, 2014


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