Valsa George


A Fantasy


Dozing on a hammock
Strung between two towering pines
With the sky above-
colour washed in turquoise blue
and the waters below
reflecting that heavenly hue,
you came to me
sailing in a dream
like the strains of a symphony
causing endless vibrations
in my solitary heart

you showed up
all too sudden
like a rainbow on my vacant sky
after a cloud burst of cloistered grief
to blaze it with iridescent shades

Your smile
embalmed my bruised spirit
with the coolness of a summer drizzle
falling, like manna
over starved Israelites
in their arduous odyssey
through blistering sands

Your passionate breath,
spewed on my face
bore the scent of opening buds
in the mazy tangle of wild creepers
growing dense in nearby woods.

Your amorous whispers
fell in my ears
*with the sweetness of the melody
from Krishna's flute
with Radha near, love sick
her lips curled in an immaculate smile.

Your soft footsteps
like the jingle of a court dancer
echoed in the silence of my soul
with a hundred evocations

As the jingles
came nearer in synchronizing rhythm
I held out my arms
to clasp you in tight embrace
and reel you in frenzied jig

But you vanished,
vanished,
with the swiftness
of bubbles rising and breaking
in a beer glass,
leaving me to my desolate zone

The sky overhead had changed
into another shade

Still I lay in mid air,
with my eyes sealed tight
to re-live that dream
once again!

Submitted: Monday, October 08, 2012
Edited: Tuesday, October 09, 2012

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*According to Hindu Scriptures, Radha and Krishna were so devoted to each other that their romance remains a love legend of all times.Radha would fly into a state of ecstasy with the songs flowing through Krishna's flute.

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  • Gold Star - 11,163 Points Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (7/19/2014 11:55:00 AM)

    Simply profound and overwhelming...........Valsa.........the imagination touching sky and beyond......with beautiful,
    alluring words.................. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 2,827 Points Savita Tyagi (6/18/2014 8:27:00 AM)

    I was browsing through your poems to find some thing to read and found this gem. Loved every thing about the fantasy. Beautiful write. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 2,827 Points Savita Tyagi (6/18/2014 8:27:00 AM)

    I was browsing through your poems to find some thing to read and found this gem. Loved every thing about the fantasy. Beautiful write. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 13,547 Points Akhtar Jawad (6/2/2014 9:47:00 PM)

    Your amorous whispers
    fell in my ears
    *with the sweetness of the melody
    from Krishna's flute
    with Radha near, love sick
    her lips curled in an immaculate smile.
    Lovely poem, specially the above lines. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 5,834 Points * Sunprincess * (1/29/2014 1:36:00 PM)

    ..........oh my I feel like I was there....it was a blissful moment full of love and ecstasy...the fantasy is so exquisite and so fine...and I enjoyed every word....love it completely dear poetess... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 23 Points Doug Bentley (4/23/2013 1:23:00 AM)

    Breathtaking! Complex. Delicate. precise imaging & cadence. subtle, jarring. masterful weaving. just the first impressions of a drop-in. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 5,495 Points Neela Nath (11/12/2012 10:29:00 PM)

    Radha and Krishna are according to Indian philosophy, Prakiti and Purush, Atma and Paramatma. Radha's love for Krishna is meant to be one with Paramatma. Very nice maam. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Nader Baheri (10/19/2012 8:29:00 AM)

    Romantically piece of written.so fascinating

    I know nothin about Radhika and Krishna in the Hinduism.but i searched a little about it.what i learn from it, is that Radha was Krishna's lover or as it is written Atma Tu Radhika Tasya which u know the meaning better than me.
    I believe that we can learn alot from their love and relationship.the impression that a lover could have on his/her mate.Their relationship or the impressions on their eachother's minds.
    In our tradition poetry we have the same poems and the stories about lovers like (Shirin and Farhad) or (Lyla and Majnoon) .
    I learned alot from this poem.\\\\Muchas gracias for sharing
    cheers (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Www. Poemhunter.com/m-d-dinesh-nair-2 (10/15/2012 7:46:00 PM)

    The very development of thoughts and crafting of the stanzas excel here and this poem is a feather to your cap of poetic exuberance. The profusion of the poetic devices has a great level of aptness over here.
    Even the poets from the lands where English is the first language may learn a lot from your poems of this kind, Madam Valsa... (Report) Reply

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