A Diary Five (La Isla Mambo) Poem by Ahmad Shiddiqi

Lovely dedication to a lovely lady...thanks for sharing it...10++

You have a silver tongue, very discriptive.

Very nice to read the diary five.

Is this the impossible love your heart longs for? A ten from me.

This is very good can u read some of mine i think i need a little work on some of them anyone will do

I like that you wrote a poem for Lynda Robson.

A Diary Five (La Isla Mambo) (dedicated to Ms. Lynda Robson, a poet friend at poemhunter) by my love-longing for you only is your heart not softened? I am a wild tiger a hunted one longing like downward swoop of an eagle for angels and mermaids make your love the mouth of Summer dew is a rosebud like the advance of flames in sunlight like sweetness of honey plunged into our soul am I truly considered as your darling angel? I have found my future in your bed of roses nevertheless you run to seek your destiny Ahmad Shiddiqi I love this poem. I could not find the ine that you suggested, I might be doing something wrong. What is La Isla Mambo? Like the dance? Spanish adds extra spice? A wild tiger a hunted one is pretty good. Nice image. The 'advance of flames in sunlight' is really good. I use the word 'like' as little as possible, simile, I just do the metaphore thing. So it would not be like the advance...but it would be...advance of flames. Clear, crisp, unhindered, no camparison. Honey plunged into your soul...wow, sweetness, nice but then a contrast...the plunge, almost forced. Please Ahmad let me know what you think.

I have found my future in your bed of roses nevertheless you run to seek your destiny yes despite all she should hve choice for destiny and us explosre it.....10 read mine si must go....come home... no separate ways

nice poem, well done

last four lines are superb!