A Death Fanatic Poem by vittal vandavasu

A Death Fanatic

Rating: 5.0


Below the dark skies
In the unforgiving twilight winter
Outside the house that sighs
The moonlight feebly showed a mentor

He was a death mentor
Who believed it was the last thrill
And he was a woe lender
Who demanded nothing to his will

He sat at the cliff's edge
Enjoying the river below
Waiting for the fall of bridge
For a leap it was too low

Smiling to himself, he was proud
He knew the ways of life
' What fools these fellows sound
who live in scrimage and strife'

Said the death fanatic to the night
As if to hear the heavens laugh in unison
he felt he knew the might and sight of right
Blind to everything preoccupied by the vision

He looked around his woebegone world
For the last time dearly
the pine trees waved sadly to behold
That person white and pearly

How could he leave
But there is truth to perceive
What of the benevolent nature
He would miss it in the future

' But I've seen my pointless world
There is not another meaning left to find
Anyway my soul was sold
I have but woe to bind'

And saying so he jumped,
To the welcoming arms of death
Smiling his last grin of bliss
Luckily without an undone wish

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Zainab Amjad 27 February 2010

You write quite intelligently.. The imagery is cold and very well developed. The way you describe your thoughts on paper is quite impressive. However, as one of your readers I would suggest you to try different styles.. Most of your poems almost follow the same theme.. Considering your talent for writing, I believe you should step out of your skin sometimes and try experimenting with your style.. You'll produce wonders. Well, its just a suggestion. :) Good work, Vittal.

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Anupama Raghavendran 04 October 2009

beautiful description...! ! ! ! ......really nice..keep writing

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Philip Winchester 01 October 2009

Clever Writing from the depths of your soul. Ask your guide to bring you into the light. You need to bring your youth to shield you from exposure by the Darker Forces on you shoulders, I would still award you a solid 10 my clever Friend.

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Lycko Chizo 09 August 2009

Wow...Nice poem wonderful imagery formed on my head while reading it... It was phropetic like... I just notice of the word 'skys' on the first stanza I think you mean is 'skies'. Hence, the poem was brilliant so 10/10!

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