7 Deadly Sins Poem by Javier Falcon
7 Deadly Sins
I am guilty of all sins,
since the first day I met you,
and deeply fell in love with you,
as you made my world turn.
As lust has conquered me,
having you always on my mind,
dreaming with you in every way,
wanting to make you all mine.
As I have been glutton,
not having enough of you,
always wanting more of you,
not sharing you with anyone.
As greed has been inevitable,
needing you to be with me,
not giving people time around you,
always having you by my side.
Being called a sloth,
since I do not love god,
as I have no room in my heart,
since it is all dedicated to you.
Going through the wave of wrath,
taking my anger out on all out there,
which have hurt you in any way,
securing you from all harm.
Feeling loads of envy,
not wanting you to leave me,
pushing everyone around you away,
as I keep you tightly in my arms.
Looking around having pride,
as I am the one which has you,
feeling special that I have such a gem,
a limitless fortune which I love.
Yet I have a great hurt inside,
so I say if loving you is a sin,
then I will meet you in hell,
and burn slowly by your side.
Sorry Now that i read you again, i see that your poem does not have any mistakes, it was my mistake..The word feel was the right one as your poem is saying Deeply feel in love with you! is it right or Am I wrong about the mistake, I thought it was suppose to be Fell in love
So perhaps your diction isn't the most intricate and complex out there, but the idea is quite original and not cliche. A great read.
This is a beautiful poem...very well penned, although I don't like the part of 'the heart not having space for God, no one deserves to be loved in a greater way then God..God is always first...Human beings make each other suffer and we lie to each other and do things that God would never do...God is faith truth and just. If you feel this way, you got it wrong, i see you are really young...And if this poem is about you..and you feel this...try to avoid that feeling...I wanted to mention, you have a little mistake, you need to revise it...in the begining of the poem where it says this..... I am guilty of all sins, since the first day I met you, and deeply -feel- in love with you, -here the word feel is fell-- as you made my world turn. you are a good poet, keep it up sweetie.. God bless you Elena
Super title; eye catching. Great ending. I could picture (mental picture) all the way through it. Liked it. Reminded me of an old (past) girl friend.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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AHHH! ! ! <333333333 loooooove it! ! ! this poem is amazing! ! i'm rly hyper right now, i got a sugar overload but this poem is magnifique! absolutely beautiful! amazing! this is going in my favessss! ! lol. ****10 <3 may