What No One Sees Poem by Levi Crum

What No One Sees



In the shadows I hide...
And at night I ride...
Because in the dark I find tranquility...
But somehow someone saved me...
And out of the ashes I rose...
Yet somehow no one knows...
In a world of black...
I now see what I lack...
I do not see what you love in me...
But you give me a new life to lead...
And now I see...
Your all ill ever need...

POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
To wander some people's questions the ashes come from
My way to represent my depression.... the girl I speak
Of Toole me from that and lifted my heart from my state
Of loneliness
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Francie Lynch 10 February 2014

Your imagery should sustain your theme with reason (i.e. where did the ashes come from) . Sometimes brevity needs more soul. Keep crafting your work til you say I can't improve it one more letter.

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Gajanan Mishra 10 February 2014

new life to lead, good writing, thanks.

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Levi Crum

Levi Crum

Missouri, United States
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