The vampire that feeds on me,
Is corrupt, evil, and full of greed,
No remorse for the bad deeds he's done,
He does ot care for anyone.
Forcibly sucking my life from me,
I try to fight back,
I try to break free.
It's too late though,
His fangs are already latched into my neck,
Soon my soul will go,
I will become a vampire too,
There is no going back.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
re·morse ri'môrs/ noun noun: remorse deep regret or guilt for a wrong committed. they were filled with remorse and shame synonyms: contrition, deep regret, repentance, penitence, guilt, compunction, remorsefulness, ruefulness, contriteness; pangs of conscience, self-condemnation, self-reproach; guilt complex [example: bri edwards has lots of REMORSE for all the bad things he's done in his life.] FELICIA, like horse, NOT like course. like Morse Code (i think) . how difficult spelling can be! ! ! i have problems as well. and THEN there are the speakers and spellers in u.k. and other british commentwealth nations. yikes! ! ! this reminds me that i want to write about a vampire going into a blood bank. i DID write one like that in a guests comments book inside a local bloodmobile, but i didn't copy it for my records. that sucks! get it? sucks? hee-hee. The vampire that feeds on me, Is corrupt, evil, and full of greed, ...... i like this. but, IF you wanted to make a rhyme out of it, just change the first line to The vampire that on me does feed, i'm not sure which version i like more...yours or mine. :) your second stanza is my favorite. it may not be my favorite poem, but it IS my favorite vampire poem i've seen on PH. how is that for a slippery compliment? thanks for sharing. maybe i should read more of yours now, because i think you might delete them all someday; i think you did that at least once. but i'm busy and, besides, i don't know that you will delete them, or if you will submit more, and i may want to see one in the future which i haven't read. :) bri i usually don't return so soon to read another of a poet's poems, but since you said in your recent message to me that you always appreciate my comments, i could NOT resist! I TRIED.