4 years ago
i dont remember the date or the time
but 1 minute before i see u online
i was a girl
happy but alone and alone, , ,
yes, , ,
1 minute before i see u online
the only thing i had was an image for a future tht could shine.
after 4 years
if u ask me i remember the date and the time
one minute before or after nine
i am a girl
sad and alone and alone
yes, , ,
1 minute before or after nine
i have a disappointing love history tht affect ur future and mine.
No expression of geuine passion, can mbe considered a mistake. I know Greenwolfe, and up to now, considered him a blutly honest critiquer, but at the same time, never abashing, or condescending. You acknowledge in your bio, that you are still working on mastering the english language....I look at the above poem, and see a witer, who likes to exercise free verse.You have solid potential...but you do need to get a hold of grammarical command, and spelling. Your poetic themes/storylines are creative & decently structured. Time, reading(as you have been doing) and proof-reading meticulously, before you post your finished product, will soon bare its merits. Commendable work, Negar! fjr
I cannot recommend this because the title does not fit the content . I consider this to be a considerable mistake . GW62
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
oh dear poet in general ia si told u before the point about ur poem had been delivered, nice poem, and good words. but i don't want to talk a lot u must take care of ur grammatical mistakes. but nice work, keep going.