These Are My Days (Dark And Lonely) Poem by William Hawkins

3/3/13
I was talking to my newest girlfiend, she's really sweet and unfortuanatily recentily got grounded (because she lied to her dad) But this poem really has little to nothing to do with her... its just when i made it, it kinda came to me... I think it's one of my favorites though, so i wanted to post it ^_^

Fell free to comment
Please ONLY post constructive critisizm... ignore my grammer errors
and please be brutally honest, as long as you can offer me an idea on how to improve my poetry (without telling me what I should do)

My poems come from the heart, but please give me new ideas for the Types of poems i can do...

To those who dont know the type i decided to do, its a Sonnet
The title at the end IS supposed to be there but its like a whisper
i do that with some of my poems, barly any of them... but its like im discussing things over to myself, kinda like its a part of my poem, but it has nothing to do with the other lines... not a stanza but whatever... now im babbling

Read my other poems, tell me what you think