The Hit Poem by Ray Hansell

The Hit

Rating: 5.0


Driving down a road
On stretch called "Dead Man's Pass"
Little did she know
Today would be her last

Driving in her car
As the music played she sang
The last thing she would hear
Was the gun as it went bang

Just one shot rang out
As it flashed in the dark
The gunman took his aim
He never missed his mark

He had just one thing on his mind
Was his job, and that was to kill
This was not his first time
As he did it with such skill

You see this was not random
It was an ordered hit
She would die in the car
Right where she did sit

Now it took the authorities
Some time to figure this out
When the investigation was completed
In their minds there was no doubt

It seem that her husband
Hired someone to do the hit
Because in his future plans
She just didn't fit

He found she had cheated
With another man
It happened to be his best friend
That he could not stand

So he wanted her dead
He didn't care about the cost
To him it didn't matter
He now knew his life was lost

He had to send a message
So all others would know
That if you crossed him
His ruthless side would show

All he had to do
Was to order her killed
It was like placing a food order
With his order being filled

The authorities could not prove
That he was the one
Who hired a hit man
To get the dirty deed done

The shooter in this case
Could never be found
For all they know he could be
Lying somewhere under ground


10-31-20/RjH

Monday, November 2, 2020
Topic(s) of this poem: murder
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
The facts are true, the road name changed so no one could make a connection. It happened somewhere in northern California.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Terry Craddock 14 November 2020

I wrote the poem 'Unforgiving Cold-Blooded Inhumane', inspired by the poem 'The Hit', by the poet Ray Hansell and dedicated to Ray Hansell.

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Terry Craddock 13 November 2020

Actually I am wondering why the husband never ordered a hit on his best friend also, both his best friend and his wife betrayed his trust.

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Mahtab Bangalee 02 November 2020

Wicked or deviI can roam everywhere HeII can roam everywhere Like the pious of heaven no one knows him/her or their address though everyone lives with them or they are in us coz- the deviI changes name, address, dress up, get up.............

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 02 November 2020

A vivid depiction of a heinous crime. Very poignant yet well crafted.

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Terry Craddock 02 November 2020

the title fits the lines you have written an extremely good poem, on an ordered hit, an option that never should be chosen, all the reasons are given, a life choice a soul choice, taken by all murders, those that kill themselves and those that hire killings

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