Revisions Poem by warner treuter

Revisions

Rating: 5.0


Revisions are what poetry is all about.
Double-digit revisions show you care.
I remember writing a poem about a man
Who lived in a weird area where
Many of the deer seemed to have a nick in their ear.
After 30 years of trying, our hunter always returned
Without his deer - except
One day he drove home through town
With his kill, a good sized buck
Strapped to the hood of his car.
A solid head shot. He explained to everyone
That now that he had got his deer
He could quit hunting; besides, he said,
My eyes is gettin' too bad to aim, anyways.

I like to write poems like that, but they do take
Some revisin'.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Varanasi Ramabrahmam 24 August 2009

Revision helps the youthful outburst of feelings mature and poise and equanimity adorns the verse. Liked the poem much.

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Marvin Brato 23 August 2009

Poems are written by instinct, yet better ideas come up to make it better if not best through revision! profound thought, sir!

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