My Boy And His Smile Poem by Ailish Canning

My Boy And His Smile



Im falling in love with the boy behind that mask,
Im falling in love with taht boy in the dark.
Hes waving at me in the pit of my heart,
I cant wait until we really start.
Your catching my eye as far as a mile,
Im falling in love with your boy-ish smile.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Robin Bennett 18 July 2012

There are a few typo's right off the bat you need to fix. This one you need to dig deeper. It's not very deeply emotional, it's all on the surface. Make the reader feel what it is you see and feel. Let them into all of your senses.

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