Love And Sin Poem by Drack Valentine

Love And Sin

Rating: 5.0


Love a feeling for the pure
Sin of course has its allure
To the wicked rancid and wretched for the lusted tempted and forever tainted
Love is a blighted hated faulted feeling for the weak starved and self-deceiving

Sin a feeling for the impure
Love of course is more obscure
To the purest highest and prudent for the fairest gentlest and forever meekest
Sin is a lewdest sickest foulest of feeling for the freak whose carved a life of deceiving

Love and Sin for us all
Let’s get together and have a ball!

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Drack Valentine 01 March 2008

Thank you very much for your comments I made this up today after overhearing my friends talking about people in a very black and white manna so I wrote this to capture two points of view (none of which are my own hehe) . I don't really see right and wrong good and evil moral and immoral such titles I believe are human constructs. For me I see choice and consequence little more. PS: weak starved is what I meant thanks nice catch ill go edit. PSS: this is my 2ed poem ever made hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed wrighting it :)

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Harlan Simantel 01 March 2008

Nice surprise ending after the strong contrast of sin and purity earlier in the poem. 'week starved'? 'weak starved' isn't that what you meant? NIce contrast also of short direct lines with long, descriptive lines. I like short poems like this one, with one basic idea or theme. Personally, I tend to see purity and sin, or good and evil, in gray tones, not black and white.

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