In The Whirl Of Thoughts Poem by Valsa George
In The Whirl Of Thoughts
as thoughts flew round
like thistle downs in the air,
there shot from him a suppressed sigh.
he strained to remember-
"when was it I last got a call from my children"?
he rocked in agony
his heart beats quickening....
how little he sought
and how little he gained!
he lived for his children.
well settled, they now stay far away.
in the mirror
peering into his disintegrating face,
he airs out....
- his loneliness
- his ailments
- his thirst for his children
his voice trailing into the heedless sky
until they shrink down to a single breath
in and out, in and out......
like a lizard waiting for its prey
he sees Death waiting near.
he envisions a coffin lowered down
not borne by anyone familiar
but by some strange hands
gladly he steps down
closing his eyes, he lies inside
waiting for the warm kiss of his children
a parting gesture due for any parent!
Wow! Wow! You have wonderful and unlimited thoughts to motivate your readers. Poets are genius and so you are too. You have felt High High Holiness and a mirror reflects face of trust.
Thank you Flower Prince for your reading of the poem and the comment!
Lonelines and despair do share some common bonds with death. You find that connection through some magnificent imagery. A fantastic verse, Valsa.
A poem that reveals the agony an old man suffers in his old age when he is literally deserted by his children.He succumbs to a world his lonliness and limitations. He waits for his children and grandchildren to offer him the last rites, being it his ambition..10
Valsa- -thank you for giving the lonely and fading away old people a voice. May this heart-breaking poem awake the hearts of children and grandchildren and friends and strangers to give a little attention to the needy hearts among us.10++++++++++++++++++++++++ and onto my fav
So glad this poem of mine was chosen as poem of the day! (not sure which day) Thanks to poem hunter and all those good poet friends who encouraged me by posting comments. Sorry I couldn't respond to your comments as I was away from home traveling! I shall respond to your comments as and when I get time!
A tragic situation very well conceived, and well expressed too! Congratulations on having this well deserved honor, your poem being selected the 'Member Poem of the Day'!
Beautifully crafted and well executed write. The imagery is so compelling making the reader a witness of the dying parent 's thirst to see his children. Very gripping. Onto my Poem List.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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A pragmatic work dear madam! You have endearingly unfolded the painful truth of life especially when someone is about to take rest after end of life's journey... the appended picture makes this brilliant piece of work poignant...10/10
Thank you Dillip for your beautiful comment, high rating and admiration of the image. Yes, it is the sad experience of many aged ones.