I Love You Poem by Gianni Pintus

I Love You



Think of you all night long,
Think of you all day strong.

Just loving you with all my words
It is good but don't seem enough.
Loving you when smiling,
Still brightens my day while Im sailing.

I hope you know what's in my heart.
Because loving you means will be no hurt.
Think of you all night long,
Think of you all day strong.

Just loving you with all my words
It is good but don't seem lenough.
Loving you when smiling,
Still brightens my day while Im sailing.

I hope you know what's in my heart.
Because loving you means there will be no hurt

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Marama Kelly 26 December 2008

Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concept. I enjoyed the read and the imagery that came forth of the love that will transcend even time. Hope you don't mind, but found a couple of things that a bit of tweaking would help to enhance your work: 2nd verse,2nd line, you have 'lenough' instead of 'enough' and again in verse 4, second line, and you have used 'I'm' earlier on and it would help to remain in consistency, line 4 has 'Im' (Both verses 2 and 4) In verse 3 line 2, you have 'Because loving you means will be no hurt', suggest 'Because loving you means there will be no hurt', and again in the last line of this poem. Overall though, well written, well worded, well expressed with a good flow and rhythmn from beginning to end. Many blessings to you

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Gianni Pintus

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Olbia, Italy, (Island of Sardinia)
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