Herself Poem by whistle gal

Herself

Rating: 4.3


She looks past herself
As Billy Joel sings
'I want you just the way you are, '
And thinks to herself,
'What a lucky girl.'

She looks inside herself
As he tells her,
'I will never control you, '
And thinks to herself,
'Now I will let you.'

She looks beyond herself
At the girl she thought she would be.
Where is she now?
She thinks to herself,
'I can still catch her.'

She looks around herself
And wonders what took her so long.
'Have I been here all along? '
And begs herself,
'Please let go this time.'

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Raynette Eitel 19 May 2006

You are clearly a poet and we welcome you. Now let us see more. The simplicity in this one belies the deepness of your thinking and your understanding of human nature. I liked it. Raynette

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Chuck Audette 19 May 2006

Hi.welcome. Good start here. A bit amazed to see 2 pages of comments on a debut poem. Hope you can fix your Mom's computer - we miss her at the Poetry in Motion contest. -chuck

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Sylvia Spencer 19 May 2006

I first want to welcome you as a poet and I must just say I really enjoyed your first posted poem/ com on Gal lets see more, then you will have us all nocking on the door of your page. Cheers Sylvie

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Duncan Wyllie 19 May 2006

Like the young bird ready to fly, you have beautiful wings and we can see the beginning of a wonderful flight path, Well done you have a lovely style and good form to your structure Love Duncan X

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Bravo! This is a wonderful example of self-actualization. Thanks for sharing this.

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Original Unknown Girl 07 May 2008

I love this, it's very clever but also deep. I like how you give over yourself finally to this person who you know will take great care of you. It's lovely. HG: -) xx

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Scarlett Treat 02 April 2007

I hesitated to comment on your work, because, after all, I am your mom, and it may appear I am partial to you...ah, what the heck, I AM! You are so dear to me, but this poem makes me think that you may be all grown up now, Yes? ? ? It is beautiful, a soul-serching piece, and I love it...and you. Scarlett

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Jerzegirl *~~ 31 January 2007

I think you've read my mind as well...Keep writing, I will be reading :)

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When did you read my mind? - Mine, and that of so many others, for sure. Otherwise put; this is something so many will relate to, subject-wise. In respect of the flow and the penning generally, it is absolutely superb. I want more. t x

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Ian Bowen 12 June 2006

If this is a taste of thing to come, I look forward to you future pieces. Regards, Ian

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