Drown Ocean Poem by sabrina spriggs

Drown Ocean



sometime in your life that drown in water
the way you do I know they said everything
for a reason the lowing point in your heart
it does matter how your feel in life were you need
to be in your heart and in your mind and soul
that you really feel very alone
there was big change that had take place down
the road we have been on
endless the world we have been on
what do you see in my heart you see kindness
that I have cry so much
the sunset as come down a lot of time so much
I have see the darkness the light come down
to set me free what I have come everything
what do you see when you closed your eye's at night
the dream sometime when you wake up in the morning the dream sometime when you wake up in the morning
now and then
following your heart and following your mind
to see were it take you
that your showing it take you
that you have showing me mine heart
you have been writing by my side my whole life
peacefully and joy at the sometimes'
road that you have sent me
the night and da my whole life matters on this
from heaven
cross me a river

Wednesday, July 19, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: drought
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Jefferson Carter 19 July 2017

Sabrina, some awfully weird syntax and diction here. Maybe stop writing for a while and READ lots of good contemporary poetry (Mary Oliver, etc.) You're bound to improve. If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Yrs, JC

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