Dream Poem by Bianca Baier

Dream



have a dream,
dream of anything u want.
when u go down the stream,
believe anything u want.

whe it is time for u to leave,
just leave everything behind.
when u have a poem up ur sleave,
write it down do leave it behind.

when there is a love in ur life,
go up to them and ask,
no matter wat it is that u want to acomplish,
so it for only u and no one else.

love for who u are,
and not wat u want to be.
the other person should love u for who u are,
and not wat they want u to be.

i us to have some one in my life like that,
but now he is gone.
i want to love so much,
but it is hard to do that when u have no one to love.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Greenwolfe 1962 26 January 2009

The first line of the last verse needs to be written again. It makes no sense. Also, the ' u ' s need to be replaced by ' you '. It just doesn't work any other way. These divert attention from the message. Otherwise, I found it to be a pleasant writing. GW62

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John Smith 21 January 2009

Hopefully your dream will come true again.

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Akito Emo 21 January 2009

this is so nice... i wish my dream wil come true! ! ! i like it very much!

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