Death Or Deceive Poem by Mihir Modi

Death Or Deceive



DEATH OR DECEIVE

"Terrorism is a new fashion for the town" read the headlines

Away from the town at my farmhouse, were everything was fine.

Enjoying cookies with hot tea when the Door bell rings

No one at door strange it seems

Noticed a parcel wore black outfits with a letter beside,

"See you in heaven", note scared me, as no one was by my side.

Tried calling police but number was busy,

Network went fluctuating as the climate was breezy.

I flinched when parcel clicked a sound of TICK TOCK,

Creeps into skin with sweaty hands as I was totally shocked.

I realized that I was holding a bomb, for which my senses were shivering,

Laboured breathing, final moments of my life began its reverse counting.

Heart pumping in fear and missing the loved ones

Soon the tick tock raised its pace and time took a marathon run,

BOOM it was, I screamed in fear, pain and sweat,

Found myself alive without scratch or a threat.

Glanced at parcel that had a popup, flipping out a cartoon of paper and clay,

It had big red nose and his tee read "HAPPY FOOL'S DAY"

A prank by my cousins, who were scolded left and right, but we ended in laughter

Realized, worth of life, live it to the fullest, as who knows what happens after.

Monday, August 18, 2014
Topic(s) of this poem: fun
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 24 August 2014

i THINK you want Deception (a noun) , not Deceive (a verb) in the title. maybe not. you ARE the poet. this is a well-told, engaging story with a surprising and happy ending, thank goodness. not that i shy away from poems with less-than-happy endings; some of them can be good poems, entertaining, and with a worthwhile message for readers. if i were writing about my home, i would write doorbell, but maybe you have a real bell hanging near the door? did you mean to capitalize Door, i wonder. Noticed a parcel wore black outfits with a letter beside ... ...a parcel wore black outfits... sounds strange to me. maybe it is due to different ways of speaking there as opposed to here. when i read it i try to imagine a parcel/package/box/bundle wearing black pants and shirt. it is not clear to me WHAT Creeps into skin, but it DOES sound creepy! i might have handed the parcel to someone else and run away; but it sounds like you were alone. throw it out the window, QUICKLY! ! ! - - - - - - - - - - - Soon the tick tock raised its pace and time took a marathon run, ... i'm not sure if this means time seemed to go by quickly or slowly. BUT i do like the line. :) - - - - - - - - in the u.s.a. we have April Fools' Day. here is a wikipedia article about it: April Fools' Day (sometimes called April Fool's Day or All Fools' Day) is celebrated every year on the first day of April. Popular since the 19th century, the day is not a national holiday in any country, but it is well known in Europe, Australia and the United States, and it is celebrated as a day when people play practical jokes and hoaxes on each other. The jokes and their victims are known as April fools. Hoax stories may be reported by the press and other media on this day and explained on subsequent days. The earliest recorded association between April 1 and foolishness can be found in Chaucer's The Canterbury Tales (1392) . Many writers suggest that the restoration of January 1 as New Year's Day in the 16th century was responsible for the creation of the holiday, but this theory does not explain earlier references. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - (i rarely hear or see anyone playing a joke on people on April 1, or hear mention of it being April Fools' Day. but when i was much younger i used to hear mention of it once in a while.) as with your poem's story [which i don't know is true OR from your imagination; a poet note would be nice], AFD jokes can be cause for anxiety and even accidents. ================== i like these last lines especially, but the punctuation and/or lack of punctuation makes me wonder if it is one sentence or two. i did notice that you use punctuation some times and not other times in the poem. interesting, but could cause minor difficulties for the readers. A prank by my cousins, who were scolded left and right, but we ended in laughter Realized, worth of life, live it to the fullest, as who knows what happens after. thanks for sharing. bri :)

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