Carousel (Revised) Poem by Pablo Cruise

Carousel (Revised)

Rating: 5.0


Carousel

Pondering horses on circular courses
A purpose with nowhere to go
Their manes set flailing, faces detailing
Refusing to heed to the whoa

Butterfly travels on opulent saddles
Tiny faces exposing their heart
Some feign distraction others crave action
The youngest need help at the start

Ticketed haste to a Wurlitzer pace
In air pumped with confection
The children exact, while their parents react
To a landscape of shifting complexion

Impressions regale, the innocence unveiled
A periphery of luster and worn smooth brass
Memories made on one perfect day
And you yearned it would never pass

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Sandra Fowler 24 March 2009

Rhymes add music to the form. Very nostalgic. One can only memorize the mood to make it last. Lovely, Pablo. Warm regards, Sandra

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Anjali Sinha 26 March 2009

wowwwww i always loved to sit on that as a child at the fairs in Bandra in Mumbai nostalgic memories ---nice write dear Pablo surely 10+++ anjali (do read mine THE WINE OF HEALTH)

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Miriam Maia Padua 28 March 2009

piece that brings us back our wonderful childhood memories... very wonderfully illustrated... words are really thoughts' enhancing... i can picture out the colorful carousel as i read along your lines... 10 for this

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Yelena M. 29 March 2009

A spectacular landscape of memories painted in very rich colors.10 Best wishes. A.

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Sadiqullah Khan 31 March 2009

Very engaging piece, strong words revealing many unspoken things. You write well Pablo.10

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I chose this title as I loved the musical movie Carousel. You have painted some beautiful pictures with your words and have started the poem wonderfully. Descriptive and creative writing. 10 Karin Anderson

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Akram Saqib 05 April 2009

YOUR POEMS ARE ALWAYS FULL OF IDEAS AND THIS IS NOT DIFFERENT PRAGMATIC AND LOVELY. SAQIB

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Jake Erkens 04 April 2009

I agree with everyone. There's nothing more that I can say but 10! keep writing...... Jake

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Sid John Gardner. 04 April 2009

Wonderful memories re-created and vividly recalled..Enjoed this one, smiles all the way. Sid.

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Alison Cassidy 04 April 2009

What a magical memory you have shared, Pablo! ! ! And the poem, so prettily written too - its lyrical pace mimicking the sound of the Wurlitzer and the rising and falling of the brightly painted horses. Your first two lines in particular are a delight. Love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

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