Brother Poem by Mysan Svensk

Brother

Rating: 4.0


I love you
Can't you see
How I care
Can't you see
How I die
Die there with you
Can't you see
My pain
Cause it hurts
Yes it hurts
To see you hurt
Yourself
So bad
I love you

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Fay Slimm 11 August 2008

Hello My. This is a poem of great feeling and it comes across very clearly. You have a good aptitude. Study as much English verse as you can. But this is an excellent start. Keep writing My. Read some of my work and let me know your views. From Fay Slimm Cornwall U.K.

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Greenwolfe 1962 11 August 2008

I can certainly recommend this because it comes from the love of a sister for a brother. I particularly liked 'Cause it hurts, Yes it hurts'. And also the 'I love you' at the end. These three lines gave the poem the extra impact it needed. The lines gave emphasis to the message of the poem and made it stand out. GW62

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Vilma Xelin 10 August 2008

hate/love isn't? the most painy feeling that we can suffer inside.... is like be loving the devil... he only can hurt us, but we still can't stop loving him.... well penned! I feel it too!

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Mysan Svensk

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Köping, Sweden
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