Beyond My Control….. Poem by Abhijit Surve

Beyond My Control…..

Rating: 5.0


We put ourselves before another,
Stay closely affixed to each other..
There's no you and there's no me,
One soul, one heart, it's always we..

You are the strength I need to keep,
It's just your voice that lets me sleep..
The only reason that, I am not weak,
Are all those comforting words you speak..

The floor beneath just vanishes by,
When I am with you, I learn to fly..
Everything you do is fair and true,
The world you show has everything new..

I love you more, it's true, I swear,
Being the one who needs all your care..
Yes, it's your loss, of which I fear,
Precisely the reason I hold you dear..

Just hold me tight and never let me go,
Pull me close, speak the words I know..
The words of solace and comfort alike,
Those mesmerizing talks, is what i like..

Look at me at this beautiful wreak,
And glide your hands around my neck..
Wipe my tears that are seeping through,
And tell me, I'm the only one for you..

Living your life, breathing your breath,
Without you, I’d live a silent death..
You are my passion, you carry my soul,
I'm glued to this perception, beyond my control..

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Chitra - 28 July 2009

a passionate devoted write!

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Obinna Eruchie 06 August 2009

Full of affection and devotion, lovely piece with good rhyming scheme.

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Susan Aparejo 04 August 2009

I love the rhymes and the tactile devices you use to show its poetic harmony. I voted 10 for this. Please read my poem too ' Legacy to My Mother'. thanks.

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Kristina B; Williams 04 August 2009

i gave you a 10, and placed this on my fav list.good job.you and i have almost the same style of writing, so i am biased..lol..read intertwined souls, and through the tough times, for they are similar to this..actually you might want to read a few others, i think you might enjoy them, for as i stated we have the same style

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Anjali Sinha 04 August 2009

good rhymes and lots of love ummmmm-10 anjali

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~ Jon London ~ 28 July 2009

Great use of rhyme to express your feeling in this passion laced piece...well composed and thought out....10

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