(b) 26 (Pain/Longing) Forever? Poem by Renu Rakheja a.k.a Tranquil Ocean
(b) 26 (Pain/Longing) Forever?
Were you a cloud hovering over me
giving solace to my heart for a few days
continuing in your journey
forever?
Were you the sun that warmed,
lighting up my life for a few days
now obscured by clouds that swarmed
forever?
Were you a ship passing by
that anchored in my life for a few days
moving on to another shore in your quest
forever?
Were you a shooting star
blazing through my life for a few days
All I'm left with is a bunch of your thoughts
forever?
We will continue our ways
but you have touched my heart
with your purity and tenderness that will stay
forever
I love the idea of someone touching you so much their presence never leaves you. Beautiful. Well done with you imagery, this poem is alive. ~Linley~
Yearing questions left by a moments touch, placed in the finest of poems.......
Love lost, but was it ever truly found, other than but for a segment of glinted passion? Great storyline here, & i agree with me lassir, tara'bout the profoundity of th' repetitious, subliminal seed-planting of the past tense...GONE.... & that looming, thwarting, question maark......To be continued, perhaps, T.O.? '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''fjr
In the context, and finely-penned it is, the past tense burns on the mind of the reader. And begs the question. A well-written, give-us-more piece. Aptly so. t x
beautiful images here.. i can sense a very strong yearning in these lines... Asma...
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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5/4/2024 11:11:01 PM # 1.0.0.1119
It's like the hearts agree but the minds do not want to admit it. Liked it :) Preets