A Moment White Poem by John Beaton

A Moment White

Rating: 5.0


(for snow)

You lit upon the land one night,
a night of drifting lightness
when Earth became, beneath the flight
and fall of superincumbent white,
a lintel for your brightness.

You seemed at first pristine and pure,
too pure for any boot-print,
then through my window's aperture
I saw a rabbit's tell-tale spoor:
tri-footprint; jump; tri-footprint.

So out I walked and broke a track,
a track like some small Yukon
Trail where trees with bended back
had bowed their boughs so none would crack.
I climbed a creek to look on

its frozen headwall waterfall,
a fall of pools and plunges.
Arrested in a timeless stall,
it hung in air devoid of all
the movement ice expunges.

You cloaked the creek-side path knee-deep
near deeps that brooked no bottom—
black waters roiling in their sleep
below the ice panes would not keep
the wintry vows of autumn.

The icicles would, tear by tear,
in tears dissolve, transforming
to waterfalls again. Each spear
of ice, like you, would disappear
in watersheds of warming.

But while I stood and gazed at you,
for now so whitely glowing,
your short-lived beauty chilled me through;
I wished that I could blanket you
and ease you in your going.

Friday, September 14, 2018
Topic(s) of this poem: snow
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
The title comes for Robert Burns's poem, Tam O'Shanter, which contains this extract:
But pleasures are like poppies spread,
You seize the flow'r, its bloom is shed;
Or like the snow falls in the river,
A moment white—then melts for ever;

The poem is ostensibly about snow, but it's also about the way our attachment to something beautiful is intensified by awareness of its transience.

I wrote this in five-line stanzas. Listen for four beats in the 1st,3rd and 4th lines, which have single-syllable rhymes, and three beats in the 2nd and 5th lines, which have double-syllable rhymes. The last word of each 1st line repeats at the start of each 2nd line.

This poem was first published in "Eyes on BC" magazine.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Geeta Radhakrishna Menon 28 August 2018

John, you have so wonderfully created a persona of a 'superincumbent white expressed as a lintel of brightness. The slow and gradual transition of the snow from the pure to the tri-footprints, then a track, a crack into a creek.... on to icicles and waterfalls. An imagery par excellence! The philosophy - everything in this world changes! .....10

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John Beaton 28 August 2018

Thanks for the fine review and interpretation, Geeta. Indeed, it all changes, and water more than most things.

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Paul Brookes 27 August 2018

Beautiful piece very atmospheric Descriptive Muffles like a blanket overlay on overlay white and silent falling Enjoyed this I shall add it to my favourites

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John Beaton 27 August 2018

Thanks, Paul. You've interpreted it very nicely.

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