I'M Here Poem by Sally Nesmith

I'M Here

Rating: 4.0


I'm in some dark place here,
don't know where to go....
I can see you,
but only so faint
I walk around here everyday,
but i guess you just don't notice me
Everyday you look around,
and all you yell is 'you promised! '
I ask you what you mean....
but you just lower your head and weep
'you promised, you promised, you promised me! '
I still do not understand
You do not eat
you do not sleep
you do not leave
all you do
is
stare
at a photo
of
me.....

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Lawrence S. Pertillar 25 June 2005

I like your work very much!

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David Zvekic 29 May 2005

This poem builds up a lot of dramatic tension prior to the conclusion. I think the final sentence 'all you do is stare at a photo of me...' would be more emphatic if it was not broken up into 6 seperate lines. but rather into 2. all you do is stare at a photo of me. Very good effot.

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