Whisper Poem by Black on Black Arts

Whisper

Rating: 4.5


Waking up back hurting.
Sun in my eyes, mosquito bites on my skin I begin to itch.
Swating away flies I get up from my concrete bed.
Bloodshot eyes see blurry in the light from crying myself
to sleep at night.
I've hit rock bottom but it feels like rock bottom has hit
me as I wander aimlessly for food and shelter.
Just a little taste to curb my growling stomach.
Water ever so important now more than ever as my lips dry
and crack from thirst.What do I do now?
I pray but they go unanswered.
Don't wanna go on living anymore my pain unbearable slowly
losing all sense of reality.
I fall to my knees wanting death a release from the pain
and suffering of a wasted life.
I scream but all that comes out is a whisper
Do you hear it?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Darkangel Flyfree 25 July 2012

This is very deep and powerful, you have touched my heart yet again with your poems! I can so relate to wanting a way out of life, it can hurt so bad, i feel ya. Great poem! ! !

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Kasia Fedyk 26 July 2012

Very beautiful, filled with deepest emotions and powerful longing for peace within and light through out. I felt every emotion in this poem and became one with it. Beautiful write! Kasia

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Neela Nath Das 27 July 2012

sometimes whisper becomes the voice of the spokesperson of oppressed class.Loved this write.thanks for sharing.

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Payal Parande 31 July 2012

such a painful poem a cry from heart....very well put every word express its own emotion... splendid work thank you so much for sharing it with us best wishes, payal

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Meena Mustafa 30 July 2012

An emotive poem... full of depth... a wonderful write.

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Shai Cherry 07 June 2020

Love the poem I felt so much emotion passed in this poem Kwep up the good work

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Dr Antony Theodore 08 May 2016

I fall to my knees wanting death a release from the pain and suffering of a wasted life. I scream but all that comes out is a whisper Do you hear it? pain described with deep emotion.. feeling of pain is filled in your words using different analogies..... thank you dear poet. tony

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Roseann Shawiak 04 February 2016

Intensely and deeply emotional, gripping my heart and mind with it's silent cry, feeling the pain so completely filling your words and taking me with it into depths of your poem. Rhythm throughout the poem tends to draw out all the pain and emotion from within and placing it crying into the essence of your soul. An excellent and heartfelt poem, totaling encompassing the frustration and heartache of living in poverty. Amazingly poignant! Thank you for sharing it, RoseAnn

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Ramesh Rai 13 May 2015

iA very beautiful poem with silent cry. Soul always desires for emancipation because life is full of frustration and delusion..Love your emotions. Keep it up. Thanks for sharing.Full marks.

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Ekaterina M. Polischuk 28 August 2012

that is not a poem... that is a very painful message for people around you... a silent voice. i agree with Payal Parade, it is very emotional. and as a novelist and a poet i can say, it has a special melody. it is sad but beautiful from the side of your imagination and the way you show it

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