When The Clouds Chose To Drift... Poem by indira babbellapati

When The Clouds Chose To Drift...

Rating: 3.0


the sky was overcast
and any moment
it may unleash
needles of rain drops
we were on a recliner
in that circular verandah
wiping the sweat off the brow
for some reason
the clouds decided to
drift with the wind
and the sky turned
plain and forlorn
i casually looked into your eyes
and saw the reflection of the
thick dark clouds floating on
the skies of the whites of your eyes
ready to burst...

no, i didn't ask you the reason
but held your hand firm
and assumed the form of a piece of earth
all ready to absorb the gush of rain...

16oct2009
21.59hrs

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Kranthi Pothineni 16 October 2009

Nice thought with apt title made to ponder on. Good craft.

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Kranthi Pothineni 16 October 2009

Nice thought with apt title made to ponder on. Good craft.

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Kesav Easwaran 29 October 2009

emotions well absorbed...in the poem lines i mean! good work

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rago rago 26 October 2009

well pictorized and the inner warmth felt in ecstasy..................

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Sandra Fowler 24 October 2009

Your title paints a beautiful poem picture. Wonderful use of metaphor. The warmth of your hand says, 'I am here' in any language.10/10. Love, Sandra

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You had such insight in this person using the clouds drifting as a metaphor for depth of feeling. It created pictures in my mind, and this Indira, is what a poet like you writes to give visions to your reader.....10 Karin

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Sarvesh Kulkarni 17 October 2009

yes... you've done your duty here even if you can be the shoulder to one needing person. gentle but firm expressions. loved the poem ma'am. thank you.

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indira babbellapati

indira babbellapati

visakhapatnam, india
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