Thank You Mama Poem by kelvin karani

Thank You Mama



Looking back into the past
My life is a rain forest
A desert, bigger than the Sahara
And I, an almost lone sojourner

My life is a Greek puzzle
Cryptic and not for my kind
No clues and I can't fill it
For I'm a kindergartener

I am just but a grown up toddler
Having no knowledge of reality
I stumble and fall

It was not enough for her
For nine months to carry me
The kicks and aagh, the labor
My diapers and that awful cry

The innumerable problems she's been through
Because of me, for me
Oh! The pains yet always true
So many problems but she didn't flee

Always there she has been
Through childhood and the teens
No greater love have I seen
Than this of a mother so good

Mama, oh mama Africa
How do I, your child
Be good like you, be your replica
To say thank you, thank you to you.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Marama Kelly 26 December 2008

Thanks for sharing your thoughts, view and concept. This is well expressed and has a good flow and rhythmn from beginning to end. Hope you don't mind, but found a couple of errors that if corrected can only enhance your work. The first five verses are separated from the las two with a large gap. In the fourth verse, line 2 you have 'for nine months to carry I'. This would read better is you replaced 'I' with 'me' A suggestion only for the 6th verse, line 2, you have...'through childhood, through teenage hood'. suggest 'through childhood and the teens. (It flows better.) Apart from all that, this is good. Many blessings to you

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