I offer myself as…… clay
Spiky spine of ego removed
Make me unmake me
Knead me into deformities
Of desires
When done..............
Let algae of
your angst grow unto me
Own me in hatred
If your love spiky spine grow
That ''I offer myself as…… clay/Spiky spine of ego removed'' needed to be simile but just finished to be a metaphor.Just perfect.I love it.10++
very interesting and clever, you once again write a great one!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
WOW..a wonderful powerful writing.. sincere desire to be as a clay, may be can be given as a gift on a plate of love to her.........excellent... loved it....10+++++++