Short Lyrics (Sixteen-Characters) Poem by Perdita Young (Hanna Wang)

Short Lyrics (Sixteen-Characters)

Rating: 5.0


(I.)
Joy-
see scenery of seasons
savor poetry and painting
undisturbed.

(II.)
Upset-
to rush around ever blind,
as Time flows away
traceless.

(III.)
Bustle-
joyous crowd of holiday shoppers
bright flowers bought
regardless of price.

Oct.18th,2008. An early practice.

Short Lyrics (Sixteen-Characters)
Tuesday, March 20, 2018
Topic(s) of this poem: alone,happy,life,poetry,time
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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Susan Williams 05 May 2018

Upset- / to rush around ever blind, / as Time flows away / traceless. [- - Now this is a demonstration of the power inherent in brevity when the image is painted vividly with the exact right words. Well-done, Perdita! ! ! !

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Kumarmani Mahakul 11 April 2018

Scenery of season motivates mind and we easily perceive nature with thought ad perception. A nice poem is beautifully penned...10

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Kostas Lagos 22 March 2018

Such a beautiful poem! Thank you!

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Bernard F. Asuncion 21 March 2018

Perdita, such a heartwarming poem......10++++++

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Kumarmani Mahakul 20 March 2018

Well expressive poem with lovely theme. Enjoyed. Thanks for sharing.

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