Senryu Series Iii: Sundown At Altas Lakes Poem by Lillian Susan Thomas

Senryu Series Iii: Sundown At Altas Lakes

Rating: 5.0


Trek in summer's heat:
we get lost, dizzy in thin air -
suddenly, a path.

Deer droppings lead us
To water's edge: Shh! Not alone!
Stag and doe bend to drink.

Ears twitching, alert
for danger. Sniffing us out,
they leap. Blur of brown.

Snow melt cascades here
wet prisms break sunset hues
many rainbows.

Damp clothes hang on shrubs.
We bathe naked in cold pool.
Dust, sweat washes away.

Under waterfalls
I drink from your golden skin -
My thirst, unquenched.

Path leads back to camp.
We eat cold snacks. Who needs fire?
Aflame with passion.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Ashraful Musaddeq 11 June 2009

Nice pieces with assorted ideas.10+++

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Paul Hansford 10 April 2009

I love it (what else is to say in 20 characters?)

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William Stoneberger 10 April 2009

very nice and provocative...

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