Man’s Thought Factory Poem by ArmourQuill Hunter

Man’s Thought Factory



In my Thought-factory I have a foreman named Mr. Defeat;
And one named Triumph-, of which I like to greet.
Mr. Triumph is always positive-; he gives me reasons why I can-.
But Mr. Defeat has depreciation thoughts, and is really not my fan.

Yet I can signal “either one” to my beck-and-call…
If my signal is positive, then Mr. Triumph will take the ball.
But if I say- “It’s a lousy day-, ” Mr. Defeat will make it pay…
For he’s a “great picture painter too-” and proves to me that it is true.

And if I say “it’s such a fine day, ” though it’s raining all around-,
Mr. Triumph will say “how refreshing- we need this rain in town.”
Been thinking of firing Mr. Defeat-, he uses so much space and time.
For if I would let him-, he’d take my whole Thought-factory over…

And that’s “no friend of mine-.” Mr. Triumph is so much kinder.
He’s encouraging and shows me “how to succeed…”
Mr. Defeat suffers from a mind “deadening disease…”
It’s called “excusitis-, ’ of which I should be freed.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
K Duero 20 April 2006

Seems to be a conflict of egos. Was this your intent? mildly depressing...perhaps your thoughts of postive and negative are simply polar opposites as nature intended. you did not describe your male vs female views within yourself; this could be the highs and lows of an ordinary man yet the outlook is what you choose to view. perhaps if you paid mr defeat more; he would appear more positive. otherwise i thought interesting yet i am not sure of true intent of conflict of self. good luck...this was my first visit to site and i intend to read more from all poets.

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