I woke alone,
ignorant of your absence.
I woke alone,
knowing what I can not have.
I will wake alone,
remembering what could have been.
2. This does not work either. It's all general and abstract. There is nothing that conveys any specific experience. And the point of poetry is to convey specific experience.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I like this one too, nice and simple and you get the point. Nice job! ! !